(Get Answer) – Writing A Reflection 2
For this assignment, you will write a reflection that explores how you chose to incorporate feedback concerning your argument, exploration of the issue, and effective source integration into your persuasive essay as well as how your incorporation of resources supported your claim. Additionally, you will note any challenges you faced in incorporating resources and developing your argument throughout the writing process.
Answer the following questions to help you consider how you ultimately incorporated feedback from the Writing Workshop in Module 4 and how you handled any challenges during the writing process. Each response should be one fully developed paragraph in length (5-8 sentences).
1. What peer review feedback did you choose to incorporate concerning your argument and why?
2. What challenges did you face in developing your argument? What could you have done differently?
3. What peer review feedback did you choose to incorporate concerning your exploration of the issue and why?
4. What peer review feedback did you choose to incorporate concerning your effective source integration and why?
5. How did your incorporation of sources support your claim? What challenges did you face throughout the writing process?
here is some feedback i received:
To me, your original paragraph and revised paragraph both still held the same meaning and thought process, so kudos on completely changing the layout. It seems as though you focused on re-organizing the paragraph and supporting sentence structure, but did not really add any extra details or support. Length wise, they look equal which does not really mean anything other than you can tell nothing was added, but merely re-organised. The only issue I had reading and understanding was your sentence “On this note, Duderstadt (1999) holds nobody can claim that they possess enough experience and do not require any more.” To me your entire essay is going to be about higher education, however, your only cited support says nothing about education. It reads that experience is ever growing, which I agree with, but experience and education are two different things so it made me slightly confused. I understand your stance on the matter and you clearly outline it. I just wonder if using a different quote that mentions education might be more beneficial. Other than that, the paragraph looks great!
Nice work including a lead that explains the issue being analyzed and briefly describes the main points of the argument.
Including a strong hook as the first sentence is a great way to engage your readers from the beginning. Based on the types of hooks outlined in our class announcements last week, which one do you think would work well for your essay? Also, if you need a refresher, I cover introductions thoroughly in my Week 5 Monday Announcement.
On the right track! I see a thesis beginning to emerge: “Unlike on-job training, which focuses more on a specific skill to perfect a particular routine, higher education equips the learner with the necessary knowledge to explore and expound on their expertise field.” What’s missing here is clarity. The best way to obtain clarity in a thesis statement is to use either the formula from MindEdge or the thesis formula in my class announcement: By looking at BLANK, BLANK, and BLANK, one will see BLANK. To review how to fill in these blanks, you can check Week 5’s Monday announcement. Additionally, here is a link for quick tips on how to craft a thesis statement:https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/545/01/.
Furthermore, a thesis must be debatable, cannot be a question, and cannot contain personal pronouns. Working with an SNHU OWC tutor for help with a thesis statement is a great way to ensure a proficient thesis in the final draft:https://my.snhu.edu:8443/Offices/COCE/WritingCenter/Pages/default.aspx.
On the right track! I see a thesis beginning to emerge: “BLAKN.” What’s missing here is relevancy. How does the thesis relate to the topic discussed? How does BLAKN connected to BLAKN? See how this isn’t clear yet. One way to make sure your thesis is relevant is to use the either the formula from MindEdge or my class announcement: By looking at BLANK, BLANK, and BLANK, one will see BLANK. To review how to fill in these blanks, you can check Week 5’s Monday announcement. Additionally, here is link for quick tips on how to craft a thesis statement:https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/545/01/.
Furthermore, a thesis must be debatable, cannot be a question, and cannot contain personal pronouns. Working with an SNHU OWC tutor for help with a thesis statement is also a great way to ensure the essay has a proficient thesis statement:https://my.snhu.edu:8443/Offices/COCE/WritingCenter/Pages/default.aspx.
Overall, good work in this area. Keep in mind that articulation also has to do with formatting. It’s clear you’re using APA style, but a few elements are still missing or off. For example, this draft is missing an abstract and the references need to be in alphabetical order. Here is a link to a sample APA essay:https://owl.english.purdue.edu/media/pdf/20090212013008_560.pdf.